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Final Fantasy XIII-3: Dead Roses
Chapter 4: The withering peddle

   Tension grew Lightning, Fang,Noel, Tifa, Marlene, Prompto, Denzel watch anxiously as suddenly Cloud and Noctis came at each other hitting each others weapons "clank, clank" the to metal weapons hit each other numerous of times sparks flew as the hit each other they jumped in the air clanging swords once again when "THUD" Noctis hit cloud down to the ground, Noctis landed on his heavy boots, Cloud got up coming at Noctis with amazing speed hitting him in the stomach with the dull part of his buster blade. Noctis coughed up a bit of blood and kneed Cloud in the chin coming at him with his sword and Cloud with his. Immediately after they stood up and came after one other, they stopped both swords grabbed by  the handle, Lightnings hands on both of their's "That's enough!' she said looking up from the floor her hair just over her eyes, she moved with such speed they didn't even see her move. "we are both on the same side, if one of us gets hurt I'm not helping you" Cloud looked at Nocits and Noctis looked at Cloud "Im not working with him" they both seem to say. "I dont care, and frankly neither does any one else, Noctis I dont like you and frankly i think i never will, Cloud i just meet you if you get on my bad side you'll stay there, now are we working together or not" Lightning let go of the swords and walked away "lets go our work here is done" They all watched as she walked "LIGHTNING!"  suddenly Serah's cries could be heard a summoning bigger then the Edge its self held Serah in its grip "Serah!" Snow yelled from where he was, Lightning pulled out her gun blade and ran toward the summoning "Serah!"

   Lightning ran toward the summoning, the group ran behind her following pulling out there weapons, Snow started to hit the summoning "Let her go". Noel took out his Sword and started to hit the summoning as well jumping in the air and hitting it multiple of times. Everyone doing the same when the gaint monster hit them all down they continued on "glang, thud, crash" continued over and over again when the gaint beast stood firmly on the ground nice and tall then sucked in air lighting out a gaint "BOOM" light of energy came at lightning and the group, and Image of Zack appeared once more taking Clouds hand "You can save your new friends he said" after the light disappeared everyone stood weak and panting blood rain down Clouds for head and he jumped in the air "here's a little help" Aerith said healing him then disappearing as Cloud hit the summoning and caught Serah landing on his buster sword that stood in the floor "Serah" they all came to her when Lightning fell to the floor. "are you ok Serah" Snow said taking her out of Clouds hands. Noctis turned to look for Lightning seeing she had fallen he ran over to her and held her in his arms "Lightning" They all turned and looked "L-Lightning" they ran toward Noctis how continued to shake her "Look at that she's has a pretty bad wound there" Tifa said "lets get her in and heal that wound" Noctis picked up lightning and started to walk to the room her gun blade falling to the floor they all just followed not noticing it.

   "Here take my hand, ill be your hero" Noctis smile was there when she opened her eyes, but right then the imag of Noctis turned into a young boy who wore his hair in a similar style to Lightnings, but in a pony tail and a dark blue-black his hand was held out to her, as She grabbed it "I thought you where dead" the boy said with a slight smile still very similar's to Noctis "huh" Lightning said "Me, i make my own fate, so save your drama for the stage" she continued letting go of his hand and dusting her self off then walking away "you wont be going very far with that wound and with out your weapon" he said holding her weapon, Lightning snatched it from him then scanned the area, behind the blue hair boy stood a dirty blond haired girl and a blond hair boy next to them a boy with the white L'Cie mark on his bear chest that showed next to another girl and male, behind them Three other males she couldnt make out, and a blond girl with pink streaks in her bangs. "how can you help your just a bunch of kids" Lightning said walking away placing her gun blade in its pouch "we kids have saved you, you should thank us Lightning" Lightning turned to them "for what helping me up, thanks" Lightning winced a little holding her wound then passing out, when she woke again the same group of kids around her but this time her wound gone. "The Names Tide, Tide Farron Caelum, I'm your son"